Chapter 1 of Fic is Up!

[irvys-sefie.livejournal.com]

I've been trying to upload the first 2 chapters, but that's not really happening right now, so I'm just gonna put up the first chapter for you guys to see. As I've said before this isn't really much yet, but after Chapter 3 the Eerieness will start!

So go here and let me know what you think!

Offer critiques, suggestions, gripes...you name it! Just review the story!
:o)

Comments

review, comments, questions!

[rayne-leafe.livejournal.com]

Yay! First chapter! you have certainly piqued my interest! I'm very curious! - and lookin forward to some more! I did find one or two errore, let me just copy them into here;

*Which meant two solid days of video games and TV movie for them* - i think it should be tv movies.

*The class was restlessly sitting in their seats* - class is plural with a verb - so it should be the class were restlessly..., or the class were sitting in their seats restlessly?

*We can meet at my house then,” Courtney said at last. “But after 4:30.”* - this is a very minor one, but what the hey - i should really be *'We can meet at my house then,'Courtney said at last, 'but after 4.30'*. One full sentence - i know, anal, but i just noticed it!

Thats all I noticed at first glance. If you need a beta I'd be more than happy to read things through for you?*and this is not me trying to get sneak previews of the story or anything^^* lol! But seriously (there i go going against my own advice and using but at the beginning of a sentence!) - I'd be happy to help! - yay for eerie fics!

For future refernce, would you rather I commented on LJ here or on the site where your fic is posted?

Hmm..whats this assignment all about!ooooh...the eeeriness is approaching!!

[irvys-sefie.livejournal.com]

Well I'd like you to review the fic on the site, I guess. Just so we don't clog up the community! :o)

I decided just to comment on the TV movies part for changes, just because I'm lazy. ^.~

Chapter 2 is up now! So far it's my favourite one. It's Simon's chapter, but it's mostly Dash in it that I like.
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2164054/2/